Main Task Pitch and Feedback

Young, happy and full of life, but not for long. In her last year of university, Leena Wilkes loses an important part of her life. She now thinks she's alone.... But is she?

This is the pitch for our main task, it was originally "London, 2012. Jennifer Dawson has lost an important part of her life after a tragic accident. She now think's she's alone, but is she?" we decided to change it because we felt that it didn't give enough information about our main character and who she was. Also we thought that "London 2012" was not relevant enough in the story-line to put in the pitch. After our teacher had given us some criticism, we added "young, happy and full of life, but not for long" to give some background information on our character and to draw the target audience in, to make them wonder why she was happy, and not anymore? We also added an ellipsis to create suspense, and keep the reader interested.

Furthermore when we asked our class mates about our pitch they asked us the following:

• How will your target audience relate to this?

Our target audience is young adults, our pitch relates to our audience because our protagonist is a university student and most young adults will be interested in watching a psychological horror of their age group. 

• How does your sub genre fit in with this pitch?

We have related our pitch to psychological horror by adding an ellipsis to create that extra suspense and keep the audience in tact with the horror genre.

• Why would we pay to watch your film?

You should pay to watch our film because there aren't many psychological films that get released very often in Oxford and our film is also going to consist of  better genre horror conventions and not the typical conventions like "fake blood" and "predictable scenes".